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Post by Jane Berg on Thu Feb 06, 2014 3:32 pm

I am clouded
By dreams
And vague horisons
And haunted by the galls
Of past expectations
And greedy alignments.
With no disjunct of faith
From root
To glories.
Only facing the
Great horizontal chasms of galaxies.
putting feet in so many
Pies
It seemed possible
To win.
But even young
The earth was plastic
To those with volition
Not scope.
And we lacked the want
Sufficient to win.
Not content to suffer
For the multiplicity.
Ah- the cruel brilliance
Of yearning at constellations.
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Post by Jane Berg on Thu Feb 06, 2014 3:48 pm

Typing on a cell phone so I think I may have posted in the wrong thread. But this is my response to the thems of the month. There is no great clue in the title- its a bit random x
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Post by Tom on Wed Feb 12, 2014 11:53 am

Nice Jane
'the cruel brilliance
Of yearning at constellations.'
Love it!
This poem is like a yawning gulf,
I get vertigo reading it.

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Post by Jane Berg on Wed Feb 26, 2014 6:43 pm

Hehe, thanks!
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Post by Jane Berg on Wed Feb 26, 2014 6:44 pm

not sure if I should change it to 'wishing at constellations' though to make the meaning more obvious - but I don't like the way it sounds.
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